Thursday 3 June 2010

shot 35 feedback

- not keen on the shake out after Macho breaks out of the pot, it just doesnt fit with the moment or his character to be honest. I think this moment requires a much more grrrrrr to triumphent moment as he breaks free from the pot, as if yeah ive done it again, i wwwwiiiiiiiinnn to add to the arrogance of his character. He hasn't realised what he's done yet. He could almost go into one of his muscle poses after breaking free.

- Hero does not look devastated as we pan over to him. His true love has been killed in a exploding pot incident and he seems so casual. He needs to be like in the animatic, almost paralyzed in shock, hands covering mouth the works....

- Similarly, Macho is too casual when comes over. He needs to look shocked himself otherwise it wont be funny when he then changes to the oooo sod it, whatever shrug off. He needs to be more awkward, as if he's about to explain away what he's done but in the end he cant be bothered.

-Hero thinking is nice but i don't think the smile suits him as it makes him look evil...yes its a quite twisted thing he does but i think the thought then cut to the credits its a better cliff hanger/moment of anticipation for the audience compared to an evil grin which will throw them off kilter to who they have previously known to be a cute, sweet character.

-Only other points would be there still seems a lot of symmetry with the arms in Macho, just a bit more offset will break up the animation here.

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